My main problem with this one is time. It's been done in fits and starts, ten minutes here and there, and as a result it's really failed to gel. In fact the only bit of it I like is the end!
It's just gone up at LH for crits. I'll do yours if you'll do mine. :-) I'd have read yours before, but I wanted to get my own story out of the way first.
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Date: 2007-10-26 09:19 pm (UTC)It's just gone up at LH for crits. I'll do yours if you'll do mine. :-) I'd have read yours before, but I wanted to get my own story out of the way first.